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Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

#celebrities #money #politicians #development
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Undoubtedly, many evidences prove more earning of the
celebities
a widely known person
celebrities
celebs
 than the politicians. While some people are still of negative view. I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages with the
countries
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country's
countries'
 development. There
are
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is
 a plethora of reasons for famous personalities earning and devoting more
money
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 than the leaders. As the visibility of audience has increased globally, more and more events
are been taking
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are taking
 place
world wide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
. Many rich companies are coming forward for hiring a
professionals
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professional
 like sport men, actor
etc
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, for advertisement. Before launching a new product, a personality
is called
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calls
 for promotion, in return larger chunk of
money
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 is earned and some proportion is given in the form of taxes to the government for
countries
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countries'
country's
 development whereas the
money
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 earned by a leader is not taxable under the law. To sustain in future, the Hot star
offer
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offers
 much of the
money
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 as
donation
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a donation
 for a noble cause while the political party devote
money
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 to only show
there
of them or themselves
their
 personal objective.
Moreover
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, famous people earn
money
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 for their fame and personalties but leaders get most of their income by corruption mode and illegal means only. If the actor's have more
money
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, they will use it for a noble
cause but
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cause, but
 the politicians will only show their power and interfere in country's decision making. Many sincere leaders, due to
shorage
the property of being an amount by which something is less than expected or required
shortage
 of
money
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 are forced to move towards dishonest means of earning income. In hindsight, famous personality earnings are more
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 than the political person. They can improve the economic development of our
country but
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country, but
 authority only forces a dedicated person with short of
money
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 to either quit or move toward illegal means of earning
money
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorsements
  • revenue streams
  • global presence
  • diversified branding
  • income sources
  • free-market principles
  • market value
  • government budgets
  • public funds
  • public perception
  • value generation
  • bureaucratic
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
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