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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
Let's talk about the advantages
first
. The
process
 is
helpfull
providing assistance or serving a useful function
helpful
 in saving
time
 in
tearms
status with respect to the relations between people or groups
terms
teams
times
 when you don't have
time
 for shopping
.
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.
 It's
also
helpfull
providing assistance or serving a useful function
helpful
 when you want to buy a
product
 which is not available in your area or state or country. It is very
benificiary
the recipient of funds or other benefits
beneficiary
 when you want to buy an international
product
. It helps the sellers having small
buisness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 and less marketing skills, to sell
productes
commodities offered for sale
products
 on
larger scale
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a larger scale
.
you
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You
 can just sit in the comfort of your house and buy things which are delivered to your door steps. The online
process
 of ticket booking saves a lot of
time
 than that of the old fashioned way. There can
also
 be
disadvantges
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
disadvantage
 of buying products online.
For
example groceries
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example, groceries
, we
can not
can not
cannot
 tell if the
product
 we are ordering is
roated
a magnitude or frequency relative to a time unit
rated
routed
rooted
 or expired or even if
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 original
product
 or not. It is fully dependent on the
seller
, the
seller
 can
also
 sell fake stuff online without even
buyer
 knowing. Even thought the online buying app have a
process
 of returning the
product
 under the listed
circumstanses it
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circumstances, it
circumstances it
circumstance it
 is totally
depended
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depend
 on the
seller
to
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in
 the
process
. And out of all of
this
 you don't get the
product
 when you needed it.
For
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In
From
this
circumstances it
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circumstance, it
circumstance it
 is more feasible to just buy the
product
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products
 offline from a nearer store where you can see and examine the
product
 by
your self
reflexive form of "you"
yourself
.
Also you
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Also, you
 cannot bargain online with the
seller
where in
(formal) where, in what respect
wherein
 the
offile
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of file
 you can totally bargain. The advantages does not outweigh the
dsadvantages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
 neither the
disadvantges
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
 outweigh the advantages. It is reliable to the situation in which the user is. It is different for every situation.
For
example if
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example, if
 the
buyer
 doesn't have
time than
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time, then
time then
 it's kind of disadvantageous to some extent. If the
product
 which
buyer
 is searching for is not available in
there
of them or themselves
their
region
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region, then
then
 online buying is very feasible for the
buyer
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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