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space exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space explorationspace exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space exploration

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 amount of taxpayers’
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 is being spent on
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 exploration every year. There are benefits
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 drawbacks associated with
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 missions. One of the main advantages of
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 exploration is that it has provided us with deeper insights into the universe
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knowledge of the world we live in.
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, scientists are able to predict weather patterns and natural disasters with the help of satellites.
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space
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 missions help
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scientists develop new scientific technologies. These latest technological innovations have
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proved useful not only for astronauts but
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 for people living on
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 planet.
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 system, which is used in
smart phones
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 and tablets, is developed with the help of satellites. It is
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 possible to predict natural disasters with the help of satellites.
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, there are
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 some downsides to exploring and finding out more about the universe. One evident drawback is that it endangers the lives of astronauts. Many accidents happened in the past.
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, the Challenger
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 shuttle exploded within minutes of its launch.
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, billions of dollars are required to build
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spacecraft
 and shuttles. And if the mission fails, the whole of that
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 is lost.
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 that could have been used to reduce the
sufferings
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 of humans on
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. Millions of people still do not have enough to eat. Countless others live in refugee camps or in extreme poverty. If even a fraction of the
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 spent on
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 research is used for improving the conditions on
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, the world would be a much better place to live in.
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,
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 research certainly enables us to learn more about the universe and because of
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 it is worth spending
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 on it.
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, spending too much
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 on
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 research is not a worthy endeavour because there are more pressing problems on
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 missions have a higher risk of failure.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-developed and clearly present the topic and the writer's stance. The essay follows a logical structure with a clear progression of ideas. Make sure to provide more specific examples to further support your points.
task achievement
You have addressed the task by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space exploration. Ensure to provide more detailed examples to strengthen your arguments and enhance the depth of your analysis.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion
coherence cohesion
Logical structure and progression of ideas
task achievement
Addressed both advantages and disadvantages

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