Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education in the curriculum for all school-age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are individuals who believe that it is really important to keep
Physical Education
the Physical Education
in schools. Others believe that children should
dedicate more
on academic subjects. In my opinion, PE in schools is a necessary measure.
, a large amount of kids leads unhealthy lifestyles. They spend too much
on the internet and don't get enough physical activity.
, their food choices are questionable to say the least. Kids enjoy fast food and sweets, that paired with little to none physical activity leads to high risks of obesity. It's a problem that more and more children and parents have to face. I believe, that one of the ways to combat it is PE in schools, which will teach students the importance of a healthy lifestyle.
, some kids are not meant for the academics and I think it's important to give them an ability to nurture their talents
sports, which they might not get
, as sports can be quite an expensive hobby.
On the other hand
, academic subjects seem more important than Physical Education. For most of
the students
that's what will give them a pass to a brighter future and allow them to go into their dream jobs. It's understandable that students, as well as their parents, will want to focus entirely on those subjects.
, I think that in
school there's
Accept comma addition
school, there's
plenty of
for both.
, PE is a good
for students to relieve the stress
that is
put on them by academic pressure, and to simply have fun.
, it is scientifically proven that our brains perform better, if we engage in physical activity. To conclude, I believe that balance in school life is important. There is enough
to take part in Physical Education lessons without it having a negative effect on
academic performance.
, physical
any specific behavior
can even prove helpful when it comes to academic success.
Submitted by Julia Rahn on

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