As a country develops, more people are able to purchase a car. Do you think that the positive for the individual outweigh the negatives for the environment?

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The more
country
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a country
develops, the more people tend to buy a
car
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. In my opinion, I consider that personal cars can bring more drawbacks for the environment compared to any advantages for
individual
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the individual
it might bring. Admittedly, there are some basic benefits for the people who have a
car
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.
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, it allows people more freedom to travel as they can choose the route themselves and take detours they want.
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, cars have built-in air conditioning, cushioned seats and other luxuries that make it a more comfortable way to travel.
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, using public transport is more time-consuming and crowded, so with having a
car
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you can read books, listen to music or even can play with kids while you are in your own
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car but those
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car, but those
all seem to be impossible in public transport.
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, despite the advantages above, I believe owning a
car
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has serious downsides for the environment.
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, the number of cars
in
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on
the road has a direct impact on air quality because exhaust fumes are a major
contributer
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contributor
contribute
contributors
to air pollution. Another negative aspect is that as the number of cars rises, the demand for more fossil fuels increases, which cause more pollution as well as a depletion of world’s resources. An issue associated impact of cars is the building of roads to support them as road building has a big impact on emissions and wildlife. In conclusion, serious disadvantages
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as pollution and depletion resources that bring for environment outweigh any positive aspects.
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