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More and more businesses as well as individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating.

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Due to
globalizing
Suggestion
globalize
, not only numerous
enterprises but
Accept comma addition
enterprises, but
also
 distinct people are opting to communicate, either in a formal manner or socially, with the aid of modern
technology
 rather than meeting each other.
This
 trend has an equal number of positives and negatives. Taking into account the ease of doing business with more convenience and faster ways of
communication
 has shown an upward trend due to changes in the manner of trading. To exemplify it, a large number of businesses opting for online platforms as they reach their
client
Suggestion
clients
 instantly and comfortably without much inconvenience.
Moreover
, larger audiences covered on social platforms as the whole world, connected with
technology
, due to globalization.
For instance
, In the current scenario of the corona pandemic, masses preferred to interact with each other on specific social networking sites and connecting every individual on distinct levels.
Hence
,
technology
 provides boost and sense of connectivity to the individuals as well as to the organizations which makes them in good stead. Despite the above-mentioned advantages
this
 trend
also
 experienced some disadvantages, Lack of interest due to
technology
 glitches is one of them, due to which organizations, many times, enterprises find it hard to channelize the
communication
 and often disconnect potential clients.
In addition
 to
this
, some trades required only
face
 to
face
communication
 as their business cannot survive, without building personal relations.
For instance
, selling a car required a test drive.
Thus
,
technology
 failure and lack of
face
 to
face
communication
 affect the business drastically, which is indeed to dire to ignore. To conclude,
although
online mode
Suggestion
the online mode
 provides wings to augment their organizations and every individual with more relaxing and energy, whereas its disadvantages are creating hindrance which is indeed
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 dire to ignore.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Convenience
  • Instant messaging
  • Video calls
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Economical
  • Accessibility
  • Physical barriers
  • Nuanced understanding
  • Impersonal
  • Misunderstandings
  • Reliance
  • Technical failures
  • Vulnerable
  • Security breaches
  • Hacking
  • Data theft
  • Sensitive information
  • Digital communication
  • Face-to-face interactions
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