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Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people argue that, developing countries require the financial
support
 from the international organisations in order to continue their
development
. Whilst the others argue that, providing a practical advice for
such
 countries is more important.
Therefore
, financial
support
 and practical aid can be supported to improve the
development
 of
such
 countries. On the one hand, it can be said that, few countries are struggling with economical, political and social issues.
Consequently
, it has led to a financial crisis in the
such
 countries even more threaten to continue their
development
.
Firstly
, from the economic perspective, there are countries face several issues which have led to increase the unemployment, low foreign income and higher poverty can be seen in the India, Nepal, Maldives and Bangladesh.
For example
, Political pressure led to create many issues,
such
 as unstable government, civil war crisis, corruption and Bankrupt. Social crisis led to several issues, mainly social unrest can be identified.
Consequently
, people no longer able to form a good relationship within the community due to the fact of unequality.
Such
 consequences can be biggest problems in the developing countries, while they tend to get international
support
 for clarifying their issues. Often, developing countries like India and Pakistan get financial
support
 from UNICEF, NGO organisations while carrying out number of conferences along with the agreements to process their loans.
On the other hand
, Some other developing countries moving towards practical aid to continue their
development
. When developing countries replace international systems, processes to their existing processes which can be enormously improved the efficiency and progress. To conclude
this
, both of these financial
support
 and practical aid in order to continue a
development
 of
such
 countries. It will help to improve the progress of the
such
 countries, while resources and assets can be well used.
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