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Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries,many small,local business are unable to compete,some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities

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supermarkets are being the centre of business in some countries.Whereas
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local trades are going down.If the trend continues
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I believe soon the local communities will be broken down. The chain stores are becoming popular day by day.People are more encouraged to purchase goods from them due to the easy access and availability of products under one roof.
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the expansion of
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it is of great concern that, supermarket expansion is causing a significant financial
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local communities depend on local business, without which the economy of the people will fall down.The small vendors and cart business will be obsolete and people will go through devastating livelihood.
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the local people can set up a common place all together and make a local market from which people of that society can buy their desired products.
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countries like Malaysia, Indonesia, Philippines
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they have tradition of night markets, which are quite popular amongst the locals and they love to buy from them.
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they always provide the best price which is affordable for anyone. To conclude
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I contend that the super shops will be the reason for
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proper actions regarding setting up a platform for the locals can make things easier.
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