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Some people believe that children's time outside of school should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. others feel that children need free time to play and relax. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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opinions
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museum
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opinions
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negligible, even
negligible even
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Museum
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museum
shoul
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
shall
 be
enjoyable place
Suggestion
an enjoyable place
 to attract visitors
expecialy
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
youngsturs
a young person of either sex
youngsters
.
Accept space
.
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the visible part of a television transmission
video
 shows in
museum
 to attract visitors. There are people who
recommeding
push for something
recommending
 Artificial
Inteligent
Suggestion
Intelligent
 technology implementations for
museum
 marketing
.
Accept space
.
 They all are recommending Dubai
Museum
 as
example
Suggestion
an example
examples
. Other side of the view is
museum
 is for
Education
Suggestion
Educational
 and knowledge
purpuse
an anticipated outcome that is intended or that guides your planned actions
purposes
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this
 group people think about traditional values of the
museum
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