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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

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theoretical
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 experience in all
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 of learning, whether in schools or colleges.I agree with
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 I will support my view with valid arguments and examples. Most of the institutes follow conventional
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 of teaching which include reading,learning and
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 can recall the concepts for a limited amount of
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 work they have forgotten it.
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 , Many
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 who have degrees in physics
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cannot even change the bulbs.
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 cannot fill out a tax form
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shortcomings
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 of a system of learning that focuses only on
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. Another example of
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 is that the current
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academic
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 classes. To illustrate,
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theory
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only there was one
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laboratory
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 I lacked proper
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understanding
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 and practical classes, I would have gained better confidence and skills.A recent study of
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 department of new
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 has shown that youngsters who
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 the
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experiences
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 than the ones who read it.
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 argument that more
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 is being spent on cramming
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 of experimental learning because of the current structure of teaching.Unfortunately,
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 on
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 stops
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 learning from
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real-world
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 skills.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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