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Some people prefer to live in the same place most of their, but other like to live in different places . Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Beyond doubt, living in the same place offers far too many benefits that
can not
can not
cannot
 be ignored.
Conversely
, there is a group of
people which
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people, which
 opines that living in different places does have more challenges in
life but
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life, but
,
nonetheless
, those challenges represent a cherished experience. To me, I believe in living in different places for many worthwhile reasons
,
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,
 as described in
this
 essay. Over the centuries, the fabric of society has been
such
 that people believe in living in a close -knit community. There are apparent reasons as they feel a sense of belonging- everyone knows
one
 another and treats them as a member of the family. Another reason that motivates to choose
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 is a convenience factor. Truly, people develop a close relationship by living together over the year.
This
 companionships
facilitates
Suggestion
facilitate
 them to help
one
 another if need be.
For example
, an old
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbour
 may graciously volunteer to watch the
next
-door house for signs of activity in need
In contrast
,
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,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that living in different places
allow
Suggestion
allows
 them to experience a whole new world of the neighbourhood and the place. Meeting or hanging out with new
people unlocks
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people, unlocks
 the door of
new relationship
Suggestion
new relationships
a new relationship
the new relationship
 and a stage for knowing about other values. They become tolerant to the society and learn to coexist with differences.
Furthermore
,
one
 feels more connected with people who have very different backgrounds.
This
 sets a
soild
characterized by good substantial quality
solid
 platform for
networking which
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networking, which
 invariably is useful in career making, too. As has been noted, both phenomena have their own splendid offerings.
However
, experiencing different places for living leaves more benefits than the other
one
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