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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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These days, many machines are available in the market to do most of the
household
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work
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, which was earlier used to be done by hand.
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 technological advancement has helped human in reducing their manual efforts.
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, there are
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 some drawbacks of being dependent on the machines, which should be taken into account.
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 with the advantages, machines
have helped
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has helped
human especially
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human, especially
 women in saving their precious
time
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 and energy. Nowadays, most of the
household
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work
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 can be done
on
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at
with
 the click of a button, so manual efforts are no longer required for daily
work
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.
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, a lot of
time
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 can be saved by using machines.
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 saved
time
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 can be used to pursue any hobby or passion. To state an example, women, these days, can manage their office and
household
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work
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 together, which was hardly possible in the past, as managing daily chores used to be a full-
time
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 job owing to the
time
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 and efforts needed for the house works.
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, machines have made people's lifestyle sedentary, which is not good for their health. Earlier
household
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work
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such
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 as washing clothes and cleaning utensils used to be done by hand, which in turn required physical movement of the body.
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, it used to be a kind of exercise for people, but now
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work
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 is done automatically by machines.
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,
machine
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the machine
have increased
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has increased
is increasing
 the monthly expenses of people because few machines need electricity to run, so huge electricity bill result in increased
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costs
.
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, increased expenses are not a big issue and can be easily afforded by many people. In conclusion, machines have made human life
easy
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easier
ease
 by allowing them to save their precious
time
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 as well as energy. In my opinion, these advantages far outweigh any of the small problems caused by machines.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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