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Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?

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Life is mixed with all kinds of emotions. It is said that "It is easy to learn something from anything, but difficult to learn everything from anything.
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 one cannot learn 100%, It is simple to do anything.There are different opinion on
this
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 topic due to various aspects.Some people think it is good to give
money
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, while others negate the idea of giving
money
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 to beggars.In my point of view I support the latter due to the following two reasons.
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, Necessity is the mother of invention.There are a lot of opportunities everywhere from
education
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 to basic
work
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 opportunities in
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 world, because people can afford an
education
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 easily these days as public
education
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 is almost free. Even children with no
money
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, rather than begging can go and learn for free.With the basic
education
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.There are many jobs like painting, working in grocery stores etc., which gives decent salaries. Even without
education
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, there so many jobs which require only physical strength which gives daily wages.
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 it is only the mindset of beggars Else, they can
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 live happily without begging.
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, Begging can never be a long term idea. There should be a permanent solution.
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 giving
money
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 will
work
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 for that instance. It should be encouraged, because
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 is indirectly making beggars lazy from our side.
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 of
money
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, at least a basic
work
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 could help beggars to improve their lifestyle.
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Money
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 giving can never be a lifetime solution In conclusion, Life is not always a bed of roses
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It has ups and downs.So only hard
work
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 and self dependent can help beggars to become better in life.I think it is wrong to encourage giving
money
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 to beggars as it can never be a turning point in their life and make them more dependent on others and lazy.
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