In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?

It is a common practice in many nations that youngsters getting paid for their
in different fields. Though few people think that
is not good, others, including me, believe that
gives the children an important
exposure, which helps them to learn and a sense of responsibility. In
essay, we will discuss how paid
gives them
and teaches them financial management. Let's begin with some ill effects of paid
children. Employment at a young age can lead to losing focus on studies. Children who start working at an early age, lose their focus from studies as they concentrate more on earning.
For example
, a recent study from the Labour department of India shows that the majority of teenagers who start earning, never go back to school to complete their studies.
, children are less experienced in any job, while working they can be exposed to an accident or serious health issues. One of my
met with an accident while working in his childhood, which did not allow him to pursue his career in the army.
On the other hand
, children can learn financial management. Teenagers who
in early age know the value of money, which leads them to manage their finances better. Students become more organized and responsible as they are not assisted by their parents. Another benefit of working is that students can get the
of their field of interest.
can help them to open a company later and generate employment for them and for others. To conclude, lost focus on studies and accident are primary reasons why people think child labour is wrong.
, I believe they can get
and the ability to manage their finances better is priceless.
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