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It is belive by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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​It is commonly believed that living in a
city
 is the best choice whilst others have a preference for dwelling in
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 over the
life
 in
cityside
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Cityside
. I think that both of
views
Suggestion
the views
 are equally good for whatever the main purposes of people are. I give my opinion and my point of view according to my experiences. ​
Firstly
, I strongly believe that people prefer living in the
cityside
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Cityside
 because there are a lot of opportunities to find a job living in an urban town.
However
,
life
 in the
cityside
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city side
 is highly costly in comparison to residing in the
countryside
.
Moreover
, the number of
entertainment
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entertainments
such
 as shopping malls, movies and restaurant across the
countryside
 is far less than that of the
city
. ​
On the other hand
, staying outside the
city
 is breathtakingly peaceful because there is no noise pollution compare with
city
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the city
.
In addition
,
life
 in the
countryside
 is not extremely expensive compared with
life
 in the
cityside
Suggestion
Cityside
 so it is fine. But, the transportation problem is a major issue for those who live in the rural places.
For instance
, you have to go so far away to buy items
such
 as exotic grains and vegetables. ​To sum up, after the comparison of several points in my own opinion, I suggest that the lives of people who live in the urban areas are more preferable apart from living in
countryside
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the countryside
. I completely agree with that because there
are advantages more
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are more advantages
 against the disadvantages to live in the
city
.
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