The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.

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The given diagrams illustrate the percentage of

water

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consumption for various uses and the amount of global

water

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usage in a

kilometre - cube

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by various sectors which include Domestic

Use

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, Industrial

Use

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and Agricultural

Use

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. It can be seen that

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apply

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utilization

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the utilization

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water

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for agricultural purposes was the highest,

whereas

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for domestic

use

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it was the least. It can be seen that the largest

water

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consumer was agriculture, which accounted for 70

percent

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per cent

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, Industry consumed a considerable amount of

water

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apply

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accounting

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for

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about 22

percent

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per cent

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and standing

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apply

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second

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this

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area. The purpose of drinking

water

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had the least

water

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utilisation at about 2 %,

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the

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utilised for domestic purposes was about 6%.

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the line graph,

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for agricultural uses was the highest, which saw a substantial increase from 500

kilometre - cube

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kilometre-cube

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in the year 1900 to 4000 kilometre-cube in the year 2000.

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apply

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the

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apply

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water

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usage for Industrial and Domestic purposes mirrored each other till 1970 and increased considerably amounting to the

second

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and the

last

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positions among the given categories.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, whereas".

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

180 words

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