The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.

The charts below show the distribution of the world's water and the use of water in three countries.
The given diagrams illustrate the percentage of
water
consumption for various uses and the amount of global
water
usage in a
kilometre - cube
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by various sectors which include Domestic
Use
, Industrial
Use
and Agricultural
Use
. It can be seen that
,
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utilization
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the utilization
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of
water
for agricultural purposes was the highest,
whereas
for domestic
use
it was the least. It can be seen that the largest
water
consumer was agriculture, which accounted for 70
percent
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.
Furthermore
, Industry consumed a considerable amount of
water
by
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accounting
to
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for
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about 22
percent
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per cent
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and standing
at
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second
in
this
area. The purpose of drinking
water
had the least
water
utilisation at about 2 %,
whereas
the
water
utilised for domestic purposes was about 6%.
According to
the line graph,
water
for agricultural uses was the highest, which saw a substantial increase from 500
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in the year 1900 to 4000 kilometre-cube in the year 2000.
While
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the
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water
usage for Industrial and Domestic purposes mirrored each other till 1970 and increased considerably amounting to the
second
and the
last
positions among the given categories.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, whereas".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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