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Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of the public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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These days have seen a considerable rise in the use of tobacco products and it has become the main cause of critical illnesses and mortality worldwide. Despite the fact that smoking can be a personal choice, it is my personal belief that the use of tobacco-related products should become illegal.
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 of all, it is an undeniable fact that smoking is detrimental to
overall health
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the overall health
 of both smokers and individuals close by since it leads to critical illness
such
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 as respiratory diseases and heart attack as well as lung cancer. For one thing, cigarette smoking is likely to provide smokers with an incentive to be dependent on modern and strong
drugs including
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drugs, including
 heroin and marijuana, for another, it may cause family breakdown.
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, drug-related laws should be applied to prohibit tobacco-related products.
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, the medical expenses of fatal diseases from
unhealthy habit
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an unhealthy habit
 of smoking usually are not affordable for smokers due to long term care.
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, most of these expenses have been undertaken by governments and they are likely obliged to reduce the other essential budgets
such
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 as education. If anti-smoking laws did not pass, the number of heavy and chain smokers would rise considerably and
that is
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 likely to be a potential threat to the government budget. By way of conclusion,
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 individuals have the right to choice of smoking, it seems to me that prevention is always better than cure and smoking prohibiting laws is essential for the sake of public health and the society.
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