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Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions in this?

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There has been a growing rise in popularity of fast
food
 worldwide. According to some, the recent trend in the widespread use of fast
food
 is beneficial to people, whereas others think reversely.
Although
 the consumption of processed
food
 makes daily life more comfortable to a great extent, it seems to me that its negative impacts on the general
health
 and a growing use of genetically modified
food
 outweigh its benefits.
Initially
, those who are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of ready-made
food
 are usually impressed with modern life and technologies. For one thing, having not enough time to prepare fresh and organic
food
 has been a good excuse for them, for another, junk
food
 and fizzy drinks are tasty and delicious enough to attract them particularly youths. The opponents of fast
food
 are usually
concern
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concerned
 about the harmful or detrimental impacts of those
food
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foods
 on
health
such
 as obesity and high blood pressure in the long term since most of those
food
are fattening
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is fattening
. If the excessive consumption of fast
food
 seems likely to continue both in
home
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homes
the home
 and restaurants, governments will encounter with serious
health
 problems
such
 as heart attack in the near future.
Additionally
,
this
 growing trend can be hazardous to farm lands and the environment. To supply the growing demand for ready-made
food
, scientists and researchers are obliged to modify
genes
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the genes
 of wheat and crops, as well as domestic animals. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm that harmful consequences of
this
 trend on both the environment and
health
is
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are
 undeniable. Since
health
 is the most important blessing which God has given us and it is irreplaceable. More importantly the destruction of the environment is not justifiable.
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