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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job?

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In
this
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 materialistic world money is the prime preference for many,
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therefore while
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therefore, while
 applying for a
job
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 they
gives
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give
are given
 priority to
salary
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 over other aspects.
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However there
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However, there
 are many others, who before applying for a
job
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, consider different facet of an occupation more crucial than the
salary
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 they would earn. I believe,
besides
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salary
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would consider
job
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security
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 as the most significant aspect. To embark with,
job
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security
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 is the most pivotal part of a
job
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, which have even higher significance than the
salary
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. Whereas
job
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 provide an employment to a person,
job
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security
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 makes it
permenent
continuing or enduring without marked change in status or condition or place
permanent
prominent
pertinent
 for them. Sometimes even higher
salary
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 would have no value if one's
job
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 is not permanent.
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,
few days
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a few days
 ago hospitals advertised about
temperory
not permanent; not lasting
temporary
 vacancies for various posts in which they were offering an attractive posts to the eligible candidates but
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job
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the job
a job
 was only for 3 months. Even after purposing the higher posts, they got only
few applications
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a few applications
, since the
job
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 was not secure. Needless to say,
person
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people
a person
the person
 should focus on
job
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security
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 as well to get a permanent
employement
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
.
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, Since
salary
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 is always the prime concern of many people working in an
institue
set up or lay the groundwork for
institute
, most in
hierarchy
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the hierarchy
 of an organization works hard to earn money to live a comfortable life. Sometimes, people do overtime and
also
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 use some
third
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-rate means to get an
incriment
a process of becoming larger or longer or more numerous or more important
increment
instrument
incremental
 in
weges
a recompense for worthy acts or retribution for wrongdoing
wages
 along with a promotion.
For example
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, whenever a company
advertise
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advertises
 about the
job
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 vacancy maximum of my friends
first
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 look for the
salary
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 before looking for the post they are offering for.
Hence
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,
salry
an African river that flows northwest into Lake Chad
Shari
 is the foremost concern and crucial aspect of an occupation for many employees. In summary, I believe, obviously,
job
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security
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 and
salary
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 offered by an organization are the most vital aspects of any occupation.
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