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Some people say that seeing ancient objects in a museum can give the public a unique awareness of history. Others say that modern media such as films or talks on the internet, provide a more effective way for the public to learn about history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Museums are the only way by which all things can be preserved. A few people believe that one can enhance their knowledge about the
history
 while seeing the old objects in a museum whilst others argue that media is a better way to create awareness about
history
. I would discuss both views with my own perception. On the one hand, in the museum
,
Accept space
,
people can see the historical objects which develop their interest about
history
. With these objects, they come to know about a How their ancestors live
,
Accept space
,
what type of clothes they used to wear, people come to know about their living standard and how they used to live without any facilities.
Hence
, it enhances their knowledge about
history
.
Secondly
, in museums, they see the objects in reality, but on television, they do not give much attention to that thing. So, in museums, they can touch the objects, they can clicked photographs which will develop their interest in them.
On the other hand
, some people cannot visit in museums as museums are not located everywhere, but they can
this
 on TV, internet and on some other things. So, TV and internet
also
 play a significant role.
Moreover
, all types of historical objects are not available in a single museum, but on the internet one can watch every type of object and can read about an important role in enhancing the knowledge of the public. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that it is unfair to support or oppose anyone both have their own significance, but I still prefer Museum as they provide live experience.
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