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Some people think that all lawbreakers should be put into prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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It is believed that imprisonment is the most way to punish all offenders. In my opinion,
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, education should be applied to criminals On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some people believe that offenders need be serve a prison sentence. The
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 reason is who be sent to prison help prevent potential criminals from engaging in illegal acts, leading to serious crimes
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 as robbery or murder. Because they pose a serious threat to communities. Another reason is receiving a prison sentence will ensure the safety of other citizens. Because it helps prevent offenders from re-offending after release back into society so that they can make a fresh start
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, I think that teaching plays a vital role in studying criminals.
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, governments could be sent them to reform school with a target of avoiding breed resentment during their time imprison.
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, central authorities should create rehabilitation programmes, which will provide information and vocational training for lawbreakers with an aim of integrating into society.
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, having a large of causes of crime is a lack of training to family. Because parents spend less time taking care of their children, making children without parental care and monitoring. As a results, they spend time gathering friend due to peer pres
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a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
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, i personally believe that schooling brings a lot of benefits for offendes
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