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As the world becomes technologically advanced computers are replacing more and more jobs.Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers and discuss at least one problem that may result.

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Since the late twentieth century, technologies are rapidly growing, especially the computers and these machines are now taking the place of manual work at various jobs which were taking lots of time and efforts
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 decreasing wait in the process as well as increasing unemployment. In
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 essay, both pros and cons of advanced technology both are under discussion.
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, these computers and advance technologies are helpful
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 many places to make
productivity efficient
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productivity, efficient
, task faster and increasing accuracy
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 as CCDM cash and cheque deposit machine, it is an advanced model of ATM which is being used in banks to deposit cash or cheque, pay for loans or credit cards round the clock.
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 a huge help to banks, which not only making life easier
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 increasing business in spite that cashier is always required to verify the details and authenticity.
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, in
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 era youth are using social media, emails, and various mobile applications as a source of communication
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 of letters, mailboxes, or post offices which is under threat to absolute.
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, computers are so helpful in post offices and made their life easier to do computing or accounting, but other growing technologies are a threat to their business. In the end, computers and other technologies are growing and spreading around the globe, but due to their benefits these become essential for personal and professional life
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, the threat of increasing unemployment and abolishing ancient systems cannot be denied but humans cannot be replaced by these machines.
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