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In past people wore traditional clothes and followed their culture. These days most of them wear modern clothes , talk about positive and negative points

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"
First
 impression is the
bset
(superlative of 'good') having the most positive qualities
best
 impression"is a very famous saying. An
individulas
Suggestion
individual's
 personality is reflected by what he/she wears.In
past people
Suggestion
the past people
 did not have much of choice they had to stick to
traditinal
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
 wear only.It was thought to be disrespectful and insulting to
ababdone
forsake, leave behind
abandon
 ones culture and traditions.
However
, with passing time the preferences of the people
have changed
Suggestion
change
 these days people like to wear modern dress more often they find modern attire more stylish
,
Accept space
,
comfortable and convenient.
This
 trend seems to have offended the older generation who are disheartened by the youths complete disregard to their culture and tradition.They think the modern attire is the prime reason for sexual
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
 against women. Having said
this
 I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that dress should be a
persons
Suggestion
person's
 personal choice whether
mordern
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
Modern
 or
tradtional
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
traditionally
 one should feel comfortable wearing it.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
my personal preference would be a
fussion
an occurrence that involves the production of a union
fusion
 of both modern and traditional so as to give equal weightage to both.
Submitted by Mohammed Mozaffer Ali Ali on

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