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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, or to increase knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Many
people
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university
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 after their high school years for several
reason
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. I believe that the most common reason why
people
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university
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college
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is to have new experiences
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 life, to prepare for a
career
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, and to
increase
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 their
knowledge
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 of their personality.
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, many
people
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to
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university
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college
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 to have new
experience
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experiences
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on
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 life. Many
students
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 leave their
home
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 and move to live by
them self
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themself
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 when they go to
university
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.
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 is the first time that they have to make a resolution on their own, without their parents’ help. Making their own decisions will
increase
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knowledge
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 of
them self
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themself
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.
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,
students
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on
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 the
university
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 can meet different
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 from different nationalities and religions so
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 can learn about different
culture
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cultures
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 around the world.
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, many
people
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 go to
university
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 to prepare for a
career
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Career
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 training is becoming more important nowadays to young
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 compared to old
people
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. At
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college
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collage
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,
students
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 learn many skills for their
career
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 and they intern an internship with a lot of chances. All of these things prepare them for their
career
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,
students
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 attend
university
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collage
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college
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 to
increase
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 their self-
knowledge
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 of their personality
on
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in
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 life. They attend for that to
increase
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 their
knowledge
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in
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of
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 different subjects which they find interesting.
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, many
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 study science because they
are interest
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 in science but they work on other types of business.
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, I think
people
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 should not only focus
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career
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 when they go to
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college
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collage
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. They have to follow
about
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their personality and the great world around them
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which they live
in
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to have new
experience
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experiences
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 and
knowledge
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.
People
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 attend college or
university
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 for many different reasons (
for example
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, new experiences,
career
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 preparation, or to
increase
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knowledge
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). Why do you think
people
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 attend college or
university
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? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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