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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Infact
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In fact
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some assert that computers are
argueably
as can be shown by argument
arguably
 the most
usefull
being of use or service
useful
 discovery in the
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 century.
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Personally
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
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fundementally
in essence; at bottom or by one's (or its) very nature
fundamentally
 agree with their assertion for several reasons
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
also
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 think
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 machines have a minor
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drawback
. One reason why computers are best is it has signficantly improved people's life,especially, in education as they have revolutionized the research methods because it is actually much easier to do your thesis or study by computers than using the conventional methods like going to the library or bookshops to find some informations you are looking for,
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 students are able nowdays to obtain books from all over the glope. Another reason for computers
supperiority
the quality of being superior
superiority
, storing all the data you want in a single file forever if you keep your computer intact
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on other words, people save books
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novel
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pitcures
a visual representation (of an object or scene or person or abstraction) produced on a surface
pictures
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etc
continuing in the same way
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computers represent one of the most advanced methods of leisure
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it is possible to play games both online and offline
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inaddition
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in addition
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the social media is a new way of having fun by sharing your
personel
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
ife
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
 with your friends or even it is a good way to know new people.
Admittely
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Admittedly
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computers sometimes are detrimental because children might use them to escape from socializing or it may divert the from their studies or
writting
the act of creating written works
writing
 their homework so it is essential that parents monitor their minors and their use of computers. In conclusion
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of all the advancements in the
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 hundred years computers changed human lives
positively but
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positively, but
 only if we use the right way.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invention
  • revolutionized
  • industries
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • productivity
  • efficiency
  • advancements
  • scientific research
  • technology
  • access
  • information
  • learn
  • limitations
  • disadvantages
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