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Many student choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 it is common for families to own and run their own business. Some people think
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 is the best way to run a business
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 a potential source of problems What is your opinion It is a common trend, in some
countries
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 that families
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run their own unyielding. Some people believe that family
firms
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 selection but others
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 that it is a potential source of problems. As
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, whether family
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 choice or not is a matter of discussion which I like to explain as follows.
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 stability in which position in the family
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 their leader, who runs the employment. As a
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,
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 stability
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 within the organization. Leaders stay in
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 respective position for the
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 unless a life event
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judgment helps in the growth and success of the work which would pave the move for future generations to
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 attached to their family
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, I believe that a family business is one of the best decisions in most of the
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, it is noticed that the needs of the family are at stake,
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 every member in the organization has some sense of commitment and accountability towards the tough
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firms
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 commitment and accountability
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 to
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 understanding of the organization which would
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 to the development of the firm. Apart from that, additional benefits
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paved the way for effective sales and marketing.
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, if the decisions
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from the family
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 to conflicts between the members. Apart from that, it
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 the way for distraction in family harmony which
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 the entire firm growth and development.
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lack
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 of interest towards
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entrepreneurship which would affect the apathetic employees.
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 family
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best
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decision
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 in some
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 not
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 effect on
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 side which would
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 to collisions. As
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 more positive sides than negatives.
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