There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use a death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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The rate at which humans perpetrate consequential

offenses

a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others

offence

offences

is on the increase annually. Some persons, of which I belong, hold that the perfect method to curb

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criminal act is

death penalty

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a death penalty

the death penalty

nevertheless

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, other individuals maintain that other measures

needs

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need

to be put in place. The rationale for each view will be discussed below. Some people, including me, on one hand opine that the solution to the consistent rise in the rate at which people carry out crimes is terminating their lives. As a matter of fact, hardened criminals find it difficult to change from their evil deeds as it would have become a habit.

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, the Kaduna State Security Services in their quarterly bulletin released

last

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week revealed that the notorious kidnappers in the state in the past five years are ex-convicts and staunch criminals.

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other persons are of the view that other measures should be implemented to stop criminal activities. In the

first

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place, one of

such

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methods is torturing the bandits for a long period of time. Apparently, the use of

strong

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strongly

objects to punish criminals could be a lasting solution as they would be made to go through related pains inflicted on their victims.

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, criminals could be physically handicapped. Obviously, severing some of their body parts like their hands and legs would teach other intending and potential criminals a lesson,

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crime rate

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the crime rate

will be drastically reduced. Conclusively, some people believe that other measures

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as torturing and handicapping criminals physically are perfect ways of eradicating crimes.

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, I am convinced that an outright elimination of their existence on earth is the best way to curb

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act as their existence poses threats to everyone around them.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

286 words

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deterrent
recidivism
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ethical considerations
economic factors
social factors
community policing
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recidivism rates
community-driven initiatives
modern policing methods
death penalty
serious crimes
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