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People today are more concerned with owning material possessions than with developing friendships and family relationships.

#people #possessions #friendships #relationships
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The contemporary world is moving on, since
human mentality
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the human mentality
 is changing and rearranging toward the modern
demadnings
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. Nowadays the latest gadgets, smart clothes, fashionable bags and extremely expensive cars determine your status in society,
consequently
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, feelings and long-term relationships take a back seat.
On the other hand
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, people who get to understand the goal of life, those who appreciate and try to forge relationships with family and friends, will always be happy and satisfied with living standards. One of
key issues
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the key issues
 is that the extent of your possessions determines your status, attitude to you and your family, and your job opportunities, I mean to say that, unfortunately, the world is under control of money.
As a result
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, the community cares more
about increasing of
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about increasing
 wages and family income in general, expanding job propositions and creating comfortable conditions of living. We seem to have loads of friends, yet we are lonely. We speak to all of them everyday, yet none of them really know us. The problem we
have sits
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have sat
sat
sit
were sitting
are sitting
were sat
are sat
 in the spaces between, looking into their eyes, or at a name on a screen. Let’s take
young
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younger
 generation, by way of example, teenagers are keen on the ways to earn money, whereas they could have made friends, spent more time with their families.
However
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, it should be taken into consideration that a number of young couples breed in their children high moral standing and values. Since they have family days, trips, conversation, children feel free to ask their parents questions,
instead
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 of surfing the net.
For instance
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, my parents wanted to be their children’s friends, build up trust, make us happy and provide us with a good education. Having a dinner together, evening talks, mother’s kissing before us leaving they are all our incredible traditions, which teach us to take care of one another, be interested in
lives
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the lives
 of each other and, on top of that, forming long-term relationships. To sum up,
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