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Band 2.5

It is easy to manufacture glass bottle. do you agree with this statement?

The diagram illustrates the
process
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 by which
glass
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 bottles are manufactured to the consumers. Overall,
this
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 is a manufacturing
process
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, consists of 3 main stages with 11 steps, starting with collecting used bottles from customers and ending with packing
to
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in
 the supermarkets. At the beginning of the
process
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, used bottles are being collected from the customers. They are recycled at the collection point.
Next
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, these recycled bottles are being delivered on a truck to transport. After being washed under high pressure water, they are separated into 3 types: clear, green and brown.
This
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process
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is following
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is followed
 by transporting 3 types of distributed
glass
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 to
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glass factory
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glass factories
a glass factory
 in order to
converted
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convert
 into many pieces of
glass
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. Those pieces are
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 burned in
furnace
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a furnace
the furnace
 at a high temperature. After being heated, recycled liquid
glass
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 and new liquid
glass
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 are put into mould to have a permanent shape.The final stage of
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process
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 is filling and packing to
delivered
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deliver
 to the supermarkets for the customers.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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