you are a student at University of Sydney. Your ID card has been stolen. Write to the Local Police Station, giving details of who you are, what happened and asking what you should do to get a new ID card.

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DEAR SIR, I AM WRITING

THIS

TO FILE A

COMPLAIN

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ABOUT MY MISSING IDENTIFICATION BADGE WHILE TRAVELING BY BUS YESTERDAY THAT INCLUDES MY WHOLE COLLEGE BAG TOO. I AM A INTERNATIONAL STUDENT IN THE PROGRAMME OF DENTAL HYGIENE AT THE SYDNEY UNIVERSITY SINCE 2018. AS I USED TO STAY WITH MY FRIEND IN THE

APPRATMENT

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APARTMENT

, NEED TO COMMUTE BY PUBLIC TRANSPORT DAILY TO ATTEND THE CLASSES. YESTERDAY, WHILE I WAS TRAVELLING TO THE

COLLGE

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THE BUS, SOMEONE THEFT MY BAG WHICH I HAD KEPT ON THE OTHER SEAT

TO ME. THE BAG CONTAINS ALL THE

REQUIRE

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DOCUMENTS AND MY ID CARD TOO. WHEN I

INFORMED

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ABOUT THE

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TO THE PUBLIC TRANSPORT DRIVER,

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REPLIED THAT I SHOULD GO AND COMPLAIN ABOUT IT TO THE NEAREST POLICE STATION.

THEREFORE

, COULD YOU PLEASE ASSIST ME WITH

THIS

ISSUE

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PLEASE ADVISE ME ABOUT THE PROCESS TO GET A NEW ID BADGE. I DO HAVE

COPPIES

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COPIES

OF STOLLEN ID CARD IF THAT WOULD BE ENOUGH TO OBTAIN ALL THE

IFORMATION

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INFORMATION

ABOUT ME. OR ELSE, I AM

UBALE

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UNABLE

PROVIDE ALL THE NECESSARY PAPERS TO REGISTER FOR THE EW BADGE. IT IS MY HUMBER REQUEST TO

GUID

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ME THROUGH THE WHOLE PROCESS. I AM LOOKING FORWARD TO

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A POSITIVE NEWS FROM YOU SOON. THANK YOU YOURS FAITHFULLY

SEFALI

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SHEFALI

PATEL

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