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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
Let's talk about the advantages
first
. The
process
 is helpful in saving
time
 in terms when you don't have
time
 for shopping. It's
also
 helpful when you want to buy a
product
 which is not available in your area or state or country. It is very beneficiary when you want to buy an international
product
. It helps the sellers having small business and less marketing skills, to sell products on a larger scale. You can just sit in the comfort of your house and buy things which are delivered to your door steps. The online
process
 of ticket booking saves a lot of
time
 than that of the old fashioned way. There can
also
 be disadvantages of buying products online.
For example
, groceries, we cannot tell if the
product
 we are ordering is routed or expired or even if its original
product
 or not. It is fully dependent on the
seller
, the
seller
 can
also
 sell fake stuff online without even
buyer
 knowing. Even thought the online buying app have a
process
 of returning the
product
 under the listed circumstances, it totally depends on the
seller
 in the
process
. And out of all of
this
 you don't get the
product
 when you needed it. From
this
 circumstance, it is more feasible to just buy the
product
Suggestion
products
 offline from a nearer store where you can see and examine the
product
 by yourself.
Also you
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Also, you
 cannot bargain online with the
seller
 wherein the offline you can totally bargain. The advantages does not outweigh the disadvantages neither the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. It is reliable to the situation in which the user is. It is different for every situation.
For example
, if the
buyer
 doesn't have
time than
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time, then
time then
 it's kind of disadvantageous to some extent. If the
product
 which
buyer
 is searching for is not available in their region,
then
 online buying is very feasible for the
buyer
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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