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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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Nowadays students prefer to take a
gap
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year
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 when they finish the high school. Students think if they take a
gap
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year
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, they will start
university
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 with a fresh mind.
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, students take a
gap
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year
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 to have a long
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vocation
leisure time away from work devoted to rest or pleasure
vacation
.
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, some students prefer to continue their
study
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 to finish the
study
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 years faster. In my opinion, students must not take a
gap
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year
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 because if they will take a
gap
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year
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 they will feel that it is not necessary to complete the
university
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 education.
Firstly
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, some students
prefer
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prefers
 to complete the
study
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 to finish faster because they do not want to feel bored when they go to the
university
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.
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, most of
students
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the students
 think that 3
month
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months
 of
vocation
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 will be enough to be
relax
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relaxed
 from
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study
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the study
.
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, students are working in the
vocation
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 months to get an experience before they start the
university
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.
Secondly
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, some students prefer to have a
gap
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year
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 to have more rest
from
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of
 the
study
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, they think that 3
month
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months
 of
vocation
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 are not enough for them.
In addition
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, some students prefer to work and have experience
first
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, after that they will start the
university
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 education.
However
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, some students take a
gap
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year
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 and after it
finish they
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finishes, they
finishes they
 feel that it is not necessary to complete the
university
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 education or they don’t have money to complete the
study
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. In conclusion, while the students are studying they can
also
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 work and get some experience. Students must complete the
university
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 to get the certificate fast, because it they take a
gap
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year
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 they will feel that it is not necessary to have a certificate.
Submitted by Shweta Sharma on

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