Prevention is better than cur. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree

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People in

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world believe that researching the illnesses and curing them is too expensive. In my opinion, I would like to say that government should spend a large amount of money for preventing the diseases because implementing the diseases is our

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priority.

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of all, many diseases have been developed over the years. Without doing research, we cannot cure them.

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, some research is important for the nation.

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, we saw that recently the new virus has been called Covid-19. Our scientists and doctor’s are doing research to find out the vaccine for Covid-19. It’s because we

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that virus is new for people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

111 words

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Prevention is better than cur. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people regard video games as useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

Some people believe that traveling abroad is beneficial for personal development and cultural understanding. Others argue that traveling within one's own country is more valuable and rewarding. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace in the future. Others think the true function of a university is to provide access to knowledge for its own sake. What do you think are the main functions of a university?