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Human activities have had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this can not be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The flora and fauna has been
diminshing
becoming smaller or less or appearing to do so
diminishing
 since the human population is proliferating
.
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Majority
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The majority
 of people opine that extinction is unstoppable whilst I agree with
rest
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the rest
 of people who think some precautions can be useful for bringing a change. There are an ample of activities that show how humans misuse mother nature because of their increased needs.Primarily
,
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,
deforestation has affected the biodiversity
deletoriously
.Thousands of
plant's
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plant
 species have vanished and myriad animals became homeless
consequently
.Secondarily
,
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,
Poaching is accumulating day by
day which
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day, which
 leads into extinction of fauna.To exemplify
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The Bengal Tiger is
at
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on
 the verge of extinction. The loss of genetic-diversity cannot be recovered as the species are no
more longer
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longer
.
On the other hand
, Soveriegns ought to make some laws for protecting eco-diversity and spread awareness about it.
Government
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The government
 should stop converting woodlands into cityscapes which is the enormous reason behind
incision
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the incision
 of forests.
Instead
,
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,
they need
to begin
 re-plantation.For an instance, Chipko movement was started by some people to save trees.I believe humans must have that spirit
for
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of
 protecting the nature rather than destroying it.
Furthermore
, a small step should be taken by citizens by avoiding the utilization leather products.
As a result
,
this
 would save animals from slaughtering. In conclusion, there is still time for preserving our planet by taking some initiatives. If the authorities and natives work
simultaneously
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simultaneously, then
then
 a change can be brought.
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