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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is a tendency to believe that as the world progresses, new technologies are invented for
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 to communicate in more modern ways that renders writing
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 dispensable.
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 essay agrees with that suggestion as it is more effective to communicate in
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 modern way rather than using an old method
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 as writing
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. In my opinion, it seems that the invention of modern communications
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 as the use of cell phones
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 has made human lives easier in more ways than one. Humans are able to use smartphones or tablets anywhere and at any given time,
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 saving us the trouble of having to go places or having to wait to send and receive messages.
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, if you were to send a message using emails, it will be delivered in minutes or even seconds, whereas traditional
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 will take at least a day or two for the message to be received which is way less effective and
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,
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. Writing and sending
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 require more work and
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 costs more. In order to send a mail, you would need more information about the person to whom the message refers
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 as the complete address and PO Box.
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 to that, you would
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 need to pay a certain amount of money for each letter
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 to be mailed which would be a waste of money.
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, it costs about £0.50 each and if you were to send just 5
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 you would have spent £2.50 whilst sending electronic mail would not require any fees. In conclusion,
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 of reaching one another should be replaced with
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modernized ways of communicating because doing so will save people a significant amount of time, energy, and
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 expenses.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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