Many parents believe that children should read strict educational books and not any other entertainment books as it is were of time. Do you agree or disagree.

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Education plays an important role in people's life. It is extremely important for every

learners

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learner

Majority

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The majority

A majority

of parents think that children should read

strick

deliver a sharp blow, as with the hand, fist, or weapon

strike

study books and not other entertainment texts as it is

were

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being

of. I partially agree with given statement. I will discuss both views in below paragraphs. Many parents believe that reading the

strick

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Strick

strict

education books is very beneficial for the students.

Firstly

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, it

is develop

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has developed

develops

the

knowledge

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of pupils. To elaborate, because students receive

knowledge

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regarding science, geography as well as mathematics. They can know about different types of

knowledge

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for instance

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plents

buildings for carrying on industrial labor

plants

planets

plant

, plants, numerical.

which

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Which

they can use in daily life

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fruit

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a fruit

the fruit

full for students to

sharp

any spatial attributes (especially as defined by outline)

shape

their minds

On the other hand

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reading entertainment

Accept comma addition

reading, entertainment

books is important for scholars.

First

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is that, they read the books to gain

knowledge

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. They have

interest

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an interest

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reading the books.

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, physical books,

culinarian

of or relating to or used in cooking

culinary

and musical books.

Second

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is that they get good marks. Due to, they get name and fame in all

world

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worlds

For instance

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, Gurdass

maan

an adult person who is male (as opposed to a woman)

man

prominent person

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a prominent person

whole nation

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the whole nation

whole nations

a whole nation

. To sum up, reading

strick

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Strick

stock

strike

books is beneficial for students it is

sharp

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sharply

the brain.

but

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But

I believe that entertainment books

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are

extremely important for students because they have not extra burden for study

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they read their books with their interest

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

219 words

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Many parents believe that children should read strict educational books and not any other entertainment books as it is were of time. Do you agree or disagree.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Scientist agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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To succeed in business, one needs to learn and know math. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The figure below provide information on the number of people per 100,000 found guilty of reckless driving offences in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.