Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some people that paying taxes as
residents
in their country contributes to the development of its humanity.
However
, there are other views as well. These people hold the opinion that
residents
have more
obligation
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other than just paying taxes.
This
essay will discuss both views and analyse their credibility.
Firstly
, it is irrefutable that receiving taxes from taxpayers
,
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helps the government gain revenue and the government is able to invest these tax revenues
to
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the public infrastructure developments
such
as public transportation, parks, hospitals and schools. Without the support of government investment, many public sectors are not profitable enough to attract private investors. These public infrastructure plays
major
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role in maintaining the development of the community. The contribution made by taxpayers is significant indeed for the public as a whole.
On the other hand
, there are other
responsibility
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for
residents
to contribute as well.
For example
, during
this
pandemic, it is every member of the community to keep social distancing in every neighbourhood and wear
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a mask
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mask
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at every
in-door
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facility. The pandemic is a challenge to all
human-being
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and it
would
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not cease disturbing our lives if people do not obey the
social- distancing
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rules. Another social duty, which is vital to
keep
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a sustainable society is to classify the waste produced
on
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a household. Some countries
suffered
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a lot
waste
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of waste
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pollution
due to
the unsuccessful classifying
household
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garbage from
residents
. In conclusion, the contribution of tax revenue made to the society is remarkable indeed and taxpayers should be proud of the way they contribute to the neighbourhood.
Nevertheless
, there are other essential social
obligation
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to practice every day to keep our society sustainable.
Submitted by Jennifer Faye on

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