The diagrams below show the life cycle o f a species o f large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagrams illustrate the process of
salmon
's life
cycle.
Looking from an overall
perspective, first
diagram presents the Change the article
the first
life
cycle of salmon
, while
the second
one shows that the salmon
's life
can be divided into three parts: fry, smelt, and finally
adult salmon
.
The starting point of salmon
's life
called
fryAdd a missing verb
is called
,
when their length is just about 3-8 cm. During the Remove the comma
apply
second
period
they become larger in size growing Add a comma
,period
till
12-15 cm. Change preposition
to
However
during the third
part of their cycle of life
, when they are considrered
as adult salmons, the significant change is noticeable; they are reaching 70-76 cm, which is Correct your spelling
considered
for
7 times bigger than when they are fries.
First of all, the Change preposition
apply
salmon
eggs are located under the small stones, that are usually situated among reeds. Approximately 5-6 months is
needed to the eggs Correct subject-verb agreement
are
become
fries. After it, for about 4 years salmons are living Fix the infinitive
to become
in
the lower level of rivers, which Change preposition
on
has
fast flowing. Once they become the smelt, they change their living area to open sea, where they spend roughly 5 years. Unnecessary verb
apply
Finally
, adult salmons lay eggs in the upper part of the river because of the slow moving
there. Replace the word
movement
Then
, all
the process starts over again.Correct determiner usage
apply
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