why people should care about luxurious goods and animals?

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The evidences of the

book

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Do Android Dream of Electric Sheep?

and

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And

Indonesian news provided in the findings section has its correlations. The evidences lead to hypothesis that people nowadays and society described in the Philip’s

book

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use luxurious animals and goods to measure their social ranks.

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Therefore, they

compete and willing to do anything for it, even families. But the question is why they should do it?. In the

book

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, Rick Deckard’s behaviours confirms that he is selfish and greedy for fancy animals just to impress his neighbours.

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, he killed the Nexus-6 androids in order to afford a real animal. It

is clearly indicate

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is clearly indicated

clearly indicates

that Rick Deckard does not care how can he afford his desirable pet, what matter is to buy it as form the social standpoint it has to be done. It means that Rick Deckard indeed attempts to follow the standards. Over here in Indonesia we can see the same points as written in the Philip Dick’s

book

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, it is about the consumerism and competition in the community. There is considerable celebrities, socialites and elites who have a desire of owning fancy things and exotic pets (Pasha, 2019).

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is proven by the news and references provided in the

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finding

session whereby there is a trend and standard created among them to possess luxurious stuff and pets. Some are more than willing to do anything so that they can follow the trends and social standard including stealing (Beers, 2020).

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

244 words

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why people should care about luxurious goods and animals?

Include an introduction and conclusion

A lot of children spend time on social media surfing the internet and playing video games which hurts their studies and grades and makes them experience loneliness and health problems such as obesity. What is the reason behind this? What can the parents do to prevent it?

Tourism has negative environmental impacts on tourist areas. What are these impacts? How can damaging impacts be lessened?

Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed to hard work when they are young. Why is it so? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

An increasingly number of professionals , such as doctors and teachers , are leaving their own poorer countries yo work in developed countries . What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation ?

To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. why do you think it is important to do so? what will be the effect if children are not taught history?