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Eating a balanced diet is the most important factor for a healthy life. To what extent do you agree?

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It is often thought that balanced
diet
 plays the most effective role in the health. I can only partially agree with
this
 supposition because being healthy is impossible without physical activities, in despite of providing sufficient nutrients based on systematic
diet
.
Additionally
, forced consumption of industrial
food
 due to natural resource limitations can put us in the high risk. Physical activities have a major role in keeping
human’s body
Suggestion
the human’s body
a human’s body
 healthy. Owning to
prevalence
Suggestion
the prevalence
 of sedentary lifestyle, even with consideration of an appropriate nutrition, people has been involved in serious problems like becoming obese that can cause
heart attack
Suggestion
heart attacks
a heart attack
.
Therefore
, doing exercise by regulating metabolism, burning unwanted calories and avoiding extra fat accumulation, substantially contributes in the well-being. The industrialization of
food
as a result
 of overpopulation and lack of adequate organic resources has made most of
food
 contaminated and
hence
, had adverse impacts on
human’s
Suggestion
human
 health. Processed and GM
food
are
Suggestion
is
 relevant examples that we have been consuming since many years age, cause a plenty of diseases. Recent studies conducted among people who take balanced
food
 confirm presence of toxic substances in their bodies.
Consequently
, eating
balanced
Suggestion
a balanced diet
diet
 is unable to guarantee of soundness alone.
Although
, it is undeniable fact that having a balanced
nutrition including
Accept comma addition
nutrition, including
 consuming right nutritious ingredients
such
 as minerals and vitamins and avoiding unhealthy feeding like fast foods is one of the main factors for being healthy. In sum, if people want to pursue the healthy lifestyle they have to not only be on
diet
, but
also
 work out regularly and use natural ingredients as much as possible. It means the cooperation of mentioned factors is the most effective method.
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