Some people argue job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others believe a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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On the one hand, there is a common benefit when people have a stable lifelong career. The employee will have carefree life and certain incomes to cover the expenses
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as housing, foods and transportation cost that regular-changing worker are rarely received. It's
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suitable for people who want to experience a leisurely normal life without having to struggle to find work.
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, teachers who are already the payroll state, don not need to nervous about being fired, ensuring a regular monthly salary even they are retired and can have time with their family and experiencing social life.
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, I side with those who believe that job satisfaction is more effective than job security.
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, a person who works with a comport and pleasure will devote the best talent and status to solving the assigned tasks. A staff working hard not only improve their hiệu quả và hiệu suất làm việc but
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increase the company’s overall benefit. Therefor,
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person may have a change to advance his or her career in the future.
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, it is difficult for employees to do tasks that they were disheartened and inconvenience. If there are pressures from the work environment, colleagues or bosses, they are not easily distracted by focusing on their work, leading to serious errors that cause damage in the company. Dissatisfaction can make workers to quit that no suitable job is found.
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caused the company to incur a cost incurred when recruiting and training the new employee.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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