The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, every

nation

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does

is doing

numerous activities for

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maintaining

maintain

mounting

their

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. In present years world is a

perfect

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more perfect

place than the past years as well as respective authorities can stop spend high amounts of

money

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on their society forces. I totally disagree with

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notion. I will discuss some of relevant reasons and examples in following paragraphs. There are lots of reasons about the

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statement, but

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and foremost reason is that every force doing their job very hardly for their

nation

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because they can make their

nation

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safety and protect from any type of fight as well as attack. The

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reason is that these forces doing their job around the clock without any demands. Force's always ready for death for their

nation

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pride

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they always loyal for their

nation

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this

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, forces protect

nation

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safe because these

country

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masses can life tension free and does concentrate on their work well. The government should make proper rules and spent

money

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on forces as well as their family because they are

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pride

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the pride

country

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, many masses think the government spent more amount of forces is unnecessary the should spend more

money

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on children's education and build educational institutions and prefect teaching staff for pupils. Because their pupils will future of their

nation

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, if many people are educated in every

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nation

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nation, then

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they

country

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grow fast and assist the economy grow of

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country

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the country

. To conclude, it is clearly seen that forces are playing vital role in every

nation

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they are

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pride

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the pride

of every

country

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. They do the hardest job in their whole life for their

nation

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. These forces are

pride

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of every

nation

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so that's why the government should spend proper

money

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on these for make

country

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safe.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

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290 words

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The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The picture below shows the difference in the layout of the conference centre in 2010 and 2025.

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