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It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #course #children
Some people hold the view that it is mandatory for parents to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 themselves in courses related to parenting and how to raise their
offsprings
Suggestion
offspring
. In my opinion, I partially agree with the view as I believe that it is not an obligation,
however
, parents who are concerned may join
such
 training courses. On the one hand, it is not an obligation on parents to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 themselves in parenting
for
Suggestion
in
 raising their
child
. There are many books, magazines and videos available on the Internet that provides complete solutions
on
Suggestion
for
 raising children.
For instance
, there are dedicated channels on
Youtube which
Accept comma addition
YouTube, which
YouTube which
 provides complete information and guidance on a well-being of a new
child
, its medication and food that are vital for children's growth.
Moreover
, one may
also
 receive suggestions from their extended families or grandparents as they themselves have raised a
child
.
This
 shows that it is not necessary to get an admission on a parenting course.
On the other hand
, there are some benefits of joining an institution to explore the concept of parenting. There are some parents who are oversensitive towards their offspring and may only seek expert guidance on raising children. In
such
 instance the training institutes may assist them by providing
then
objective case of they
them
 with
first
-hand experience on how to raise a
child
.
For example
, a parenting institution in India provides a complete solution on how to behave with a
child
 with regards to its age, details on
child's
Suggestion
child
 psychology and its behaviour.
As a result
, it helps parents to behave appropriately with their children. In conclusion, I believe that it is not necessary to join a parenting course to raise a
child
;
however
, if parents are sceptical
then
 they may always opt for a professional course to clear their doubts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • parenting training
  • child-rearing
  • valuable guidance
  • effective techniques
  • child development
  • psychology
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