IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #globalisation #companies #effect #environment #support
In today’s era, increases different human activities and developing numerous of multinational companies have adversely affected by the environmental health. I confidently agree with the above mentioned statement. My opinion is justified
further
. There are myriad of side effects of
this
 trend which harm our
environment
.
To begin
 with, due
globalisation
 and a number of multinational companies deforestation has increased significantly just because of the increase in number of companies, a large area of land is used for construction of office buildings and home for its employees.
As a result
, forest and farmlands are destroyed
day
 by
day
. These processes are not affected directly on the
environment
.But, decrease gradually
such
 as soil erosion, drought, leads to flooding and many more.
Thus
 eventually ruining the
environment
Furthermore
, the
globalisation
 and the multinational companies are generating more opportunities for job as well as growth of people’s living life
day
 by
day
.
For instance
, before the increasing number of multinational, people were brought only essential items. But, nowadays they inspire buy for unnecessary items, just because of earning sources are very high in the recent years.
In addition
 to, the energy consumption of an American was five times more than that of an average Asian in
last
 five years.
Finally
, all these activities are leading to an unbalance in the ecosystem. To wrap up the discussion, it can be said that
globalisation
 and the rise in multinational companies are destroying the climate. The authority should enact some rules for rising multinational companies and
globalisation
 for control our
environment
.
Submitted by 17ee049 VRAJ DARSHIKBHAI PATEL on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: