the growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issue involved. some people think that the best way to deal with this problem to introduce more physical addtion lession in n the school curriculum .to what extent do you agree or diagree?

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IN the recent year

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there are surge in

number

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the number

owerweight

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

overweight

people.

although

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Although

may people

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

believes

that overweight people

goes

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to the health care clinic

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for

with

advice how to reduce the weight it is good.

but

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But

refers to the speaker or writer

think in

revese

change to the contrary

reverse

manner and

agrre

be in accord; be in agreement

agree

agreed

agrees

this

statsment

a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc

statement

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inclination giving ensuing

paragraph

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paragraphs

out

away from home

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of all argument my strongest view point is bulky

peolple

(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

to do more physical

activites

any specific behavior

activities

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can help in

reduce

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reducing

fat

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they

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They

go to

gym

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the gym

and other school

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and

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And

start to full nutritional food like vegetables

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low fat food

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juice without

suger

a white crystalline carbohydrate used as a sweetener and preservative

sugar

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my v

weight

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Weight

was 67 kg before 3

year

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years

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refers to the speaker or writer

realised too much

deases

an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning

disease

were

come

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coming

due to overweight.

and

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And

refers to the speaker or writer

started loss my weight with gym and dieting

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
41Grammar mistakes
 

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135 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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In many countries, traditional dress and costumes are considered effective ways of maintaining links with the past. How effective can traditional costumes be, in this sense? What other ways exist to help citizens connect with a country’s past?

Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, artifical intelligence is being used to drive cars. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or negative development?

Some people think that all university students should studt whatever they like. Others belive that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?