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the growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issue involved. some people think that the best way to deal with this problem to introduce more physical addtion lession in n the school curriculum .to what extent do you agree or diagree?

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IN the recent year
,
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,
there are surge in
number
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the number
 of
owerweight
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
 people.
although
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Although
 may people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
 that overweight people
goes
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go
 to the health care clinic
to
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for
with
 advice how to reduce the weight it is good.
but
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But
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think in
revese
change to the contrary
reverse
 manner and
agrre
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
agreed
agrees
 to
this
statsment
a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
statement
.
my
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My
 inclination giving ensuing
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paragraphs
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out
away from home
Out
 of all argument my strongest view point is bulky
peolple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 to do more physical
activites
any specific behavior
activities
.
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.
it
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It
 can help in
reduce
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reducing
 fat
.
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.
they
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They
 go to
gym
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the gym
 and other school
.
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.
and
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And
 start to full nutritional food like vegetables
,
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,
low fat food
,
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,
juice without
suger
a white crystalline carbohydrate used as a sweetener and preservative
sugar
. A good example is
,
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,
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weight
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Weight
 was 67 kg before 3
year
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years
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 realised too much
deases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
 were
come
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coming
 due to overweight.
and
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And
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 started loss my weight with gym and dieting
.
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The
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not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
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