Multicultural societies in which there are a mixture of ethnic people bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#societies #mixture #people #country

Living and working in Dubai every time with different people who have different language, cultures and most of the time I met people who belongs to the other culture.As many different nationalities living in UAE, which portraits clearest picture of the essay where people are having their own culture

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language and religion beside that they are blending it up with the UAE culture. Moving on the advantage people came here from different parts of the world where the meet different people in the workspace and different social gatherings. Mostly young people come here for developing their career and securing their future

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These people most of the time chooses their life partners within the same working place which always bring together which exchange practice language and living way. Their children are having different perceptions of thinking and adapting another way of living as they are brought up but two different nationalities parents. It's very helpful currently where man and woman are working hand to hand to meet their needs equally. They are celebrating their religion and traditional festival simultaneously. Their offspring really learning importance

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equality and diversity and broadened their vision in adapting new things like food, clothes, dialect and traditions.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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2 paragraphs

201 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Multicultural societies in which there are a mixture of ethnic people bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are some possible solutions?

The use of social media, e.g. Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact for many people in everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

Obesity is a growing problem in developed nations. What are the reasons for the increase in numbers of very overweight people? What can be done to deal with the problem?

Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?