Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected insted. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some animal species are dying out
due to
increased deforestation and radiation. Thus
, a group of people argue that Forest
department should keep Correct article usage
the Forest
Correct article usage
an eyes
eyes
on all Fix the agreement mistake
eye
animals
, while
the other group thinks that only some wild animals
should be protected. This
essay will discuss both views, followed by a reasonable conclusion.
On the one hand, all wild creatures are now in a countable numbers
, though it is necessary to keep an eye on all of them before dying out. The main reason for Correct the article-noun agreement
a countable number
countable numbers
this
problem is increased deforestation for
urbanization and Change preposition
due to
radiations
. It is true thatFix the agreement mistake
radiation
,
some wild Remove the comma
apply
animals
are now available in a large number, but there is not much time for that situation where these available spices is
on deadline. Change the verb form
are
For example
, Forest
Correct article usage
the Forest
ministry
recently reported thatCapitalize word
Ministry
,
it was Remove the comma
apply
a
their mistake that they Remove the article
apply
cannot
save Wrong verb form
could not
Bengal
Tigers. It is because Correct article usage
the Bengal
of
the past survey had enough number of Bengal Tigers, but eventually declined by 70% in just 5 years.
Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, some people believe that protection
of only Correct article usage
the protection
few
Change the article
a few
animals
is needed. It is because of
the protection of all wild Change preposition
apply
animals
can disturb the food chain. To support this
, the main source of food for wild animals
is another small creature that
means Correct pronoun usage
which
safety
of all undomesticated Add an article
the safety
spices
is not possible. Correct your spelling
species
Moreover
, freedom will be less is
all wild creatures Correct your spelling
if
kept
under the borders. Add a missing verb
are kept
In other words
, animals
can suffer from a boundary as they are free living
from their birth. Add a hyphen
free-living
For instance
, National Geographic recently reported that the Rhino was suffering from a
depression after being watched by Remove the article
apply
forest
officer.
In conclusion, it is true that some wild creatures Add an article
a forest
are needed
protection before their family tree Wrong verb form
need
died
out. I personally agree Wrong verb form
dies
with
that all Change preposition
apply
animals
should treated under rules and regulations to ensure their safety. This
might help to secure wildlife's next generation.Submitted by Narsinh Patel on
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