Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected insted. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some animal species are dying out
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increased deforestation and radiation.
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, a group of people argue that
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department should keep
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an eyes
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eyes
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on all
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,
while
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the other group thinks that only some wild
animals
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should be protected.
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essay will discuss both views, followed by a reasonable conclusion. On the one hand, all wild creatures are now in
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, though it is necessary to keep an eye on all of them before dying out. The main reason for
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problem is increased deforestation
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urbanization and
radiations
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radiation
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. It is true that
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some wild
animals
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are now available in a large number, but there is not much time for that situation where these available spices
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on deadline.
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,
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the Forest
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ministry
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recently reported that
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it was
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their mistake that they
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save
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Tigers. It is because
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the past survey had enough number of Bengal Tigers, but eventually declined by 70% in just 5 years.
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, some people believe that
protection
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the protection
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of only
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a few
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animals
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is needed. It is because
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the protection of all wild
animals
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can disturb the food chain. To support
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, the main source of food for wild
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is another small creature
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means
safety
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the safety
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of all undomesticated
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species
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is not possible.
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, freedom will be less
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if
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all wild creatures
kept
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are kept
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under the borders.
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,
animals
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can suffer from a boundary as they are
free living
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from their birth.
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, National Geographic recently reported that the Rhino was suffering from
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depression after being watched by
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officer. In conclusion, it is true that some wild creatures
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protection before their family tree
died
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dies
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out. I personally agree
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that all
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should treated under rules and regulations to ensure their safety.
This
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might help to secure wildlife's next generation.
Submitted by Narsinh Patel on

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coherence and cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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