Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that few wild animals should be protected insted. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some animal species are dying out
due to
increased deforestation and radiation.
Thus
, a group of people argue that
Forest
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department should keep
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an eyes
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eyes
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eye
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on all
animals
,
while
the other group thinks that only some wild
animals
should be protected.
This
essay will discuss both views, followed by a reasonable conclusion. On the one hand, all wild creatures are now in
a countable numbers
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, though it is necessary to keep an eye on all of them before dying out. The main reason for
this
problem is increased deforestation
for
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urbanization and
radiations
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. It is true that
,
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some wild
animals
are now available in a large number, but there is not much time for that situation where these available spices
is
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on deadline.
For example
,
Forest
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the Forest
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ministry
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recently reported that
,
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it was
a
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their mistake that they
cannot
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save
Bengal
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Tigers. It is because
of
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the past survey had enough number of Bengal Tigers, but eventually declined by 70% in just 5 years.
On the other hand
, some people believe that
protection
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of only
few
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a few
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animals
is needed. It is because
of
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the protection of all wild
animals
can disturb the food chain. To support
this
, the main source of food for wild
animals
is another small creature
that
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means
safety
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the safety
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of all undomesticated
spices
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species
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is not possible.
Moreover
, freedom will be less
is
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if
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all wild creatures
kept
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are kept
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under the borders.
In other words
,
animals
can suffer from a boundary as they are
free living
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from their birth.
For instance
, National Geographic recently reported that the Rhino was suffering from
a
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depression after being watched by
forest
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officer. In conclusion, it is true that some wild creatures
are needed
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need
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protection before their family tree
died
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dies
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out. I personally agree
with
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that all
animals
should treated under rules and regulations to ensure their safety.
This
might help to secure wildlife's next generation.
Submitted by Narsinh Patel on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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