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An increasing number of people are now using dating sites to meet their second halves. Do you think that this tendency helps people to socialize or does more harm than good?

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Nowadays, a lot of people spend around four hours per day surfing on the Internet. They do a lot of different things
for example
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 watching
series
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the series
, gaining a knowledge, searching information or finding their halves. Have you ever thought that you can find your future wife or husband on the Internet? Personally, I tend to think that using dating sites
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have
have had
 some advantages and disadvantages.
First
 of all, a lot of people have very demanding and challenging jobs and many cases on their minds, so
as a result
 they have not enough time to prepare dates.
consequently
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Consequently
, they started using dating sites. They can download different types of these pages in today’s world.
Firstly
, they have to choose some people who interested them the most and
then
, they can chat with their halves. It is very simple and gorgeous idea for busy citizens. They can text with these people, exchange with them different information and
finally
 make a date in real life.
On the other hand
, dating sites carrying some dangers. Everyone has to attach some photos and information about themselves
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 Even thought, we can spend amazing time, texting with
this
 person, we do not know their real face. Increasingly, people make fake profiles and provide wrong photos and impersonate someone else. What is more, when they decided to meet their halves in reality, it
turn
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turns
 out to be a completely different person
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 It is not careful
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 because sometimes young girls meet very old men in real life and these situations carried huge dangers. In conclusion
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 I strongly believe that using dating sites provide big disappointment and stress. We will never be sure with whom we are chatting. We should be careful and responsible when we started using these sites.
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