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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

#people #idea #schools #person #parent #skills
There
are varied
Suggestion
are varying
 points of view when it comes to raising children. Dealing with a
child
 is
such
 a delicate matter and no two children are alike, one has to be very careful in defining strategies as it can have vastly different effects on each
child
. In my
opinion there
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opinion, there
 are a lot of things that a
child
 has to learn from school and may be parenting may not be of the utmost priority. To support my point of view, I would like to state that It is imperative to define a good parenting skills
however
 the guidelines can itself be extremely debatable. Not all kids come from an ideal family house and there will be kids who may not even have a
parent
 at home or
may be
by chance
maybe
 even privy to bad/abusive/misbehaving parents. The ideal skills that we end up carving can
also
 differ from
parent
 to
parent
. By setting these guidelines of being a good
parent
, are we saying all parents have to have the following exact traits? What if the kids cannot see any of the traits in their own
parent
? The Coach/Teacher are they the perfect role models of being the perfect
parent
? Alignment of thoughts has to be critical to understand how the kids are and
then
may be
by chance
maybe
 each kid would have to be coached differently. In my opinion, kids have to be taught about human values,
people values
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people, values
, people behaviours which harm other people. If schools can inculcate deep rooted values towards any living being, kids would pass that over to anybody and everybody they meet including their parents. In turn, parents would end up learning a lot from the kids on how to be
good
Suggestion
a good parent
good parents
parent
 for the unique
child
 who is extremely caring towards self, others and the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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