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Nuclear technology should be used for constructive purposes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Advances in nuclear
technology
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 are resulting
improvements
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in improvements
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on
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in
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 various cases. These days it can be observed that many
countries
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 have been benefiting the nuclear
energy
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 in militant political activities rather than its positive aspects in people’s
life
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lives
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.
However
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, there are some proponents who claim that achieving nuclear
technology
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 is essential for superpowers to establish a power balance system
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around
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in
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 the globe, I personally agree with
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this
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the
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this
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 statement and believe that
this
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technology
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 should be used for humanitarian aims.
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, on the positive side, the advent of nuclear
technology
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 has been leading to a revolution to tackle
energy
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 crises for all
countries
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 around the
world
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.
According to
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 the experts researches nuclear
energy
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 is an unlimited resource which can be replaced by fossil
fuel
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. On top of that, using
this
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technology
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 not only can solve
fuel
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 shortage problems but
also
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 is an
environment friendly
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environment-friendly
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fuel
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.
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, in medical
sciences
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sciences,
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 nuclear
technology
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 has
used
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been used
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 as an alternative way to cure some diseases.
Consequently
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, nuclear
energy
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 has many positive impacts, with which the
world
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 would be a safe and proper place to live. From
political
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a political
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 point of view, nuclear capability is a facility for developed
countries
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 to govern other nations. In fact,
increasing
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an increasing
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 number of
countries
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 now have nuclear weapons or have the
technology
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 required to make
such
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 bombs,
makes
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which makes
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 the
world
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to
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apply
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a competition and it is the main reason
of
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for
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 conflicts among governments. Even though, all nations try to have
this
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technology
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 not to use its advantages to increase standard living, just as an essential defensive tool against super powers threats.
therefore
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, nuclear
technology
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 is a dangerous option for governments which use it as a competitive advantage and it would have been better if it had never been used to create nuclear weapons. In conclusion,
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 not
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 equipped with nuclear
technology
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 could be a danger for some third
world
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countries
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 in the face of powers with nuclear
weapon
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weapons
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, from my point of view, its beneficial usages
such
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 as replacement with fossil
fuel
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 and its influences in curing various diseases should be more considerable. In the current
world
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, despite environmental
problems
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problems,
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 we need peace more than ever.
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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • constructive
  • sustainable
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • electricity generation
  • energy demands
  • cancer treatment
  • radioactive imaging
  • scientific research
  • advancements
  • regulation
  • safety measures
  • accidents
  • misuse
  • waste management
  • radioactive materials
  • responsibly
  • benefits
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